That looks good, I can read it clearly, except fot the t/c combination which could appear as j/c, I cannot think of a solution offhand but I'm sure there is one. Of lesser concern, I would look at kerning it a bit tighter, the vertical of the G/n could extend to close to the x-height/baseline and it might be worth investigating having the swash in the opposite direction, the s seems a bit out of scale (not much though).
Tim