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Carmen
Posted by rodrigoram in
12 Feb 2004 — 10:20am
12 Feb 2004 — 10:20am
This is my new project: Carmen.
I'd be very glad to read your comments.
Here is a gif. I am attacihng a pdf too.
Saludos,
Rodrigo
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12 Feb 2004 — 10:30am
Wow, very nice!
- E: unbalanced, top arm should be slightly shorter;
- F: the bar is too high;
- H: narrow;
- S/s: the middle looks too thin, and the bottom serif is too light;
- e: light;
- y: tail is weak;
- dieresis: heavy.
Excellent work, Rodrigo.
Saludos!
12 Feb 2004 — 12:22pm
This is indeed nice.
I like all the detail you have put into it with the traps and attention to consistency. I agree with eduardo.
I addition, I might focus my attention of the figures. Generally the color should fit somewhere between the caps and lower case.
2: Modulation is wierd.
3: Modulation issues coming out of the waist (too thick too quick)
5: Modulation also odd. More horizontal emphaisis in the waist?
7: Light. Add some more to the taper at the bottom.
0: Dark.
1: Also, maybe a hair dark.
fi: The terminal on the f is too much like a circle and doesn't flow naturally from the stem.
Well done!
13 Feb 2004 — 9:49am
One other comment:
The rounded head serifs and the sharp foot serifs seem to clash a bit (see the n). Consider slightly bracketing the foot serifs.
R
13 Feb 2004 — 9:58am
Pretty nice! And complex.
You have a lot of variety in the serifs. Keep that divergence, but I think it needs a little bit of taming, like in the "j" I'd use the round/flat style (like in the "f") instead. The only glyphs that really don't work for me are the "k" (you need to terminate the leg much stronger) and the "y" (new tail). The "g" is great!
The caps are really classy - nice going. The "3" needs weight. Your "fi"/"fl" ligs seem forced.
Trapping is great, but it needs to be made consistent. Use Flower Power!
http://www.themicrofoundry.com/ss_trapping1.html
BTW, your weight is slightly heavy for typical text. But your vertical proportions are great.
Spacing: needs work, and is a hair loose overall (at least at that weight).
This is a very promising design - I hope you take it all the way!
hhp
13 Feb 2004 — 1:24pm
Hi Rodrigo
I like this serif!
Here my critique
Many of this is a question of flaver ;-)
lc 'a': Downstrok-serif is very heavy
The angel of the dick/thin contrast seams to be very different. I like it in lc 'e' and 'c' but i.e. lc 'o' or lc 'g' has another angel. Also the Uppercase... but maybe u have to fix the lc 'e' and lc 'c'. But as i just said I like the e and c more ;-)
lc 'y': like eduardo said to weak and I also agree to the to heavy dieresis
Also you should check the horizental lines. It seams that there are many diffrences.
Also check the lc 'g'. The h-lines seams also different weight.
The Tail of the Q should end like the upstroke serif of the lc 'g'
Greetings to you and go on!
Jens
13 Feb 2004 — 1:25pm
[Sorry, second Post]