Seeking critique while peeking from behind a tree.
OK, pervasive terror now almost fully confined, I submit for the first time a typeface for critique. While I already know what some are likely to be, stating the following may reduce the number of obvious views:
1.) This font will not be given or sold.
2.) It is quite uneven - the capitals don’t even match in style or size and many of the curves in all the letters are slightly different
3.) Both cases of the letter “S” are absolutely disgraceful. Ignore if possible.
What I’m hoping to obtain here is not an ordinary “change this” or “try that.” Instead, I am first merely wanting to know if I should permanently give up trying to design a typeface; second, if there are any particular aspects/letters off which I should build (i.e., the uc “P” is different from the “B,” so perhaps which looks better); third, if I’ve unwittingly designed something almost identical to some other typeface out there and; fourth, if I am missing something about typography as whole that screams from this font.
Thanks for any input, it all will be quite valued.
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3.Dec.2007 1.36pm
Hey, where’s your file?
3.Dec.2007 1.38pm
Does it showed in the preview?
3.Dec.2007 1.44pm
Technical error. Proceed
3.Dec.2007 1.58pm
cleaning
3.Dec.2007 1.59pm
In the meantime ...
3.Dec.2007 2.00pm
After only four meaningless posts and 20 minutes, I’ve finally succeeded. Somehow. Critique away
3.Dec.2007 2.07pm
Not bad. Carry on.
3.Dec.2007 2.11pm
Very intersting, Christopher Miller, but the capitals don’t match in color (weight) as well.
3.Dec.2007 2.14pm
Thanks to all so far. Nice spot, Mr. Segalini, by the way. Please see No. 2 in the original post.
3.Dec.2007 3.06pm
I personally don’t think it’s bad. In my (very amateur) opinion, it’s probably more of a display face than something you would use for body text, but the angles on letters like ’b’ and ’u’ make for an interesting effect. One suggestion I have is that it might look a little more uniform if (for example) you used the same general kinds of angles for ’c’ and ’o’ as you do for some of the other letters. I think I’ll leave further critique for those with more experience and a larger typographic vocabulary.
3.Dec.2007 3.08pm
Oh, and no, I think this font should be worked on, not abandoned.
3.Dec.2007 4.29pm
I like it. Keep working on it. You are right, the S and s need to be thrown out and you need to start over. I would take the uppercase C, flip the bottom half, and use an upward (left to right) sloping diagonal at the same angle as the other letters.
I particularly like the synergy between the diagonals in the ’yp,’ ’yin,’ and ’gin’ letter combinations. Keep that.
The P and B don’t have to match. They both look fine.
It would be helpful to see upper and lower case at the same point size.
I’d say design the numbers and punctuation next, and then kern it.
4.Dec.2007 1.37am
Think of it as a replacement of the hand lettering in comic books. It would go rather nicely in that context. (See e.g. http://blambot.com/ )
15.Dec.2007 7.33am
Try to give only one direction (leftbottom to right top) in the letters, not two. This is too distracting when reading it.
See here:
http://www.wg2007.com/direction.gif
16.Dec.2007 2.13pm
I will give that a shot and post the results. Thanks for such a great visual example to go by.