Let me know what you think, and any suggestions you might have.
You have spacing problems with the word Severe. Start by looking at the ﬁrst group of letters as a unit. Look at the SEV relationship, the gap between the E and V makes the S look too tight, the balance is oﬀ. Same can be said with the VER combination. The last E is just ﬂoating by its lonesome self. After adjusting the VER combination, see what you need to do with the last E. One last thought drop the V down so the top is even with the E’s and let the bottom of the V separate Extreme Eating from Do you dare to indulge?
Daniel Weaver » …drop the V down… I second that
The stroke weight is all wrong, the S is a bit sloppy in its curve transition and serifs, the R is weak. Why is the end E orange/red? You could try something like this with the V:
How about giving up the descending serifs on the E’s (the part that goes below the baseline). I ﬁnd it overpowering and disturbing.
Absolutely no oﬀense to anyone in this restaurant logo class, but, out of curiosity, do you not have peer critiques within class?
apparently it has been substituted by the typophile critique