You have spacing problems with the word Severe. Start by looking at the first group of letters as a unit. Look at the SEV relationship, the gap between the E and V makes the S look too tight, the balance is off. Same can be said with the VER combination. The last E is just floating by its lonesome self. After adjusting the VER combination, see what you need to do with the last E. One last thought drop the V down so the top is even with the E's and let the bottom of the V separate Extreme Eating from Do you dare to indulge?
The stroke weight is all wrong, the S is a bit sloppy in its curve transition and serifs, the R is weak. Why is the end E orange/red? You could try something like this with the V:
14.May.2004 5.06am
You have spacing problems with the word Severe. Start by looking at the first group of letters as a unit. Look at the SEV relationship, the gap between the E and V makes the S look too tight, the balance is off. Same can be said with the VER combination. The last E is just floating by its lonesome self. After adjusting the VER combination, see what you need to do with the last E.
One last thought drop the V down so the top is even with the E's and let the bottom of the V separate Extreme Eating from Do you dare to indulge?
15.May.2004 7.50pm
Daniel Weaver >> ...drop the V down...
I second that
17.May.2004 2.21am
The stroke weight is all wrong, the S is a bit sloppy in its curve transition and serifs, the R is weak. Why is the end E orange/red?
You could try something like this with the V:
17.May.2004 2.38am
How about giving up the descending serifs on the E's (the part that goes below the baseline). I find it overpowering and disturbing.
17.May.2004 8.17am
Absolutely no offense to anyone in this restaurant logo class, but, out of curiosity, do you not have peer critiques within class?
17.May.2004 8.24am
apparently it has been substituted by the typophile critique