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I am in the process of creating a vectored version of my signature. So far I have only drawn the last name, "Gray" but my full name is "James Gray." I was hoping to get some feedback early before I spend too much time on it. Should I vary the weight more/less, too slanted, change the X-height, legibility... I'm not too concerned with staying true to my penmanship because to be completely honest, it's a little sloppy. Anyways, with that being said, here is what I have so far, let me know what you think. I know it needs work.

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I think you may need a little vertical stroke before you curve in on that 'r' and its bottom stroke is a little heavy. Otherwise this is fantastic.

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I agree, the 'r' does need a little more work. I think I also need to work on the 'G' a bit. The loop in the top left doesn't seem to be aligned quite right where it crosses over. I'm going to work on it a bit tonight and try to get the first name done as well and I will post my revision. Thanks for the feedback Stephen, it is much appreciated.

Anyone else?

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I'd raise the top loop of G and not let the stroke get too thin there, so it looks solidly like part of the letter - I'm getting a bit of an ornamented "Fray" or "Jray" from this.

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Thanks, I'll keep that in mind when I work on it tonight. The 'G' definitely has some issues. I'm also wondering if I should close up the opening in the 'a' slightly. Any thoughts?

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Maybe, but don't clean up too much. Part of its charm is in its irregularity.

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Sorry for the delay, I do have an updated version here. The first name proved to be a little more difficult for me and I did touch up the last name a little bit. I still don't think it's quite there yet so I would really appreciate your feedback.

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Anyone?

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Joined: 13 Jul 2009 - 4:20am
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First thing, the "m" seems particularly clumsy. And the "a"s are different.
(and I still read "James Fray".

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Joined: 16 Jun 2009 - 10:33am
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I agree the 'm' stands out as being rough, I also think the 's' needs work. As far as the different 'a's go, I know they are a little different. My intention is not for this to be a typeface. I was thinking it would be better if they weren't exactly the same but does it just make it look off?

Again, I really appreciate the feedback. It's helping quite a bit. I will work on getting up a revision soon but if anyone has advice in the meantime, please chime in!

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Joined: 19 Mar 2004 - 1:44pm
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The lowercase letters of James seem too aligned and straight. Part of the charm of the last name was its credible rising and expanding x-height.

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Grey has more swing then James but it's very nice

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Joined: 30 Jun 2009 - 3:48am
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I am reading Aray. I had to have a look into the dictionary. Array is written with two r. So people that better speak English have another expectation and therefore the risk of a misunderstanding of the letters is lower for them.