Dana

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Over the past few weeks I

okty's picture

i'm no typography expert at all so just don't pay attention to what i say.. i think this looks a bit too

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sorry.. double post

dana's picture

Thank you for your comments, okty,

You are absolutely correct about the S, but, for some reason, I feel motivated to incjude a J whose bowl descends below the baseline (similar to some more-traditional faces). You are also correct in suggesting a few words would be more helpful... certainly a more accurate assessment of a design

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Dana, apparently you succeeded in posting, but for some reason I for one didn't get a copy of the original message!

As you say, this is very rough. Which makes it not impossible to evaluate, but requires some assumptions on our end of what your intent actually is, I mean [even] at the formal level. For example we can only guess whether you intend to make the final result smooth or rough, irregular or consistent, etc.

One thing I would guess is that you're going for Modern (uniform) widths on the caps (as opposed to "Classical"). If this is true, then I would say that the "C", "H", "L", "M", "T" and "Y" are too narrow, while "S" is too wide. In the lc, compare the "s" and "t": these are characters that should [generally] be more harmonious in widths.

Trying to figure out what kind of finish (as opposed to structure - which you seem to mostly have already) would make this design look its best, it seems to me that something with smooth, disciplined, contrasty curves -think of Peignot- would give it a character most likely to end up being used by numerous people.

hhp

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So here are some vector glyphs that represent one small degree of advancement beyond the pencil roughs.

The intent is for a design that could possibly be used in packaging or (maybe) in ad work... but I seriously doubt that the rather impractical horizontal scale would be appropriate for editorial uses.

Thanks, hhp, for your comments... while the

dan_reynolds's picture

Dana, I thing that both of the vertical strokes on the H should have the same weight. I also like the "th" ligature in the first post on this thread.

And the name of the font is cool.

okty's picture

hey thanks for writing my nickname in your font :-) it looks cool, it reminds me of flowers for some reason.. i'll leave the critique to the experts as i'm not seeing any problems with it right now

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It's looking nicer!

If you keep the weight difference in the stems of the "H" (which I might actually suggest you do) I'd flip them. The only other thing I'm noticing is that the "a" needs a corner of some sort on the bottom-right, to avoid being too much of an "o".

And it does have a certain Nordic feel to me.

hhp

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