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What's wrong with my "adhesion"?
Posted by kosal in
3 Feb 2011 — 10:53pm
3 Feb 2011 — 10:53pm
I can't seem to pinpoint why this black weight I'm working on looks off. I'm not getting a nice rhythm with it.
A distinguishing characteristic of the face is that the e has a curved starting stroke, so that needs to be kept. Everything else is meh... Any pointers?
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3 Feb 2011 — 11:20pm
Well, d, h, o (which seems to be too light) and n have a completely different structure. There is nothing of the flow that inherits a, e and s. Also the i is missing this.
3 Feb 2011 — 11:21pm
Apart from that the beginning stroke and the ending one of e are too close together.
4 Feb 2011 — 6:28am
Yes, that last one I ws just about to mention - look at the different apertures and the shape of the counters of the a, s and e.
4 Feb 2011 — 8:50pm
The e is light and lacks stress. The left side should be at least as heavy as the verticals. The bowl of the d is a little bit too heavy. These round shapes should look more similar. Set the word "ode" to get a better look without distractions.
5 Feb 2011 — 2:13am
The e is the problem. The eye is too big (compare with the bowl of the a) and I think dips too far down. Also the top looks like it's a bit sheared to the right.
The s seems to have too much stress (top and bottom are much lighter than the hood of a for example).
Otherwise I really like it :)
5 Feb 2011 — 2:20pm
Thanks for all the comments I'm noticing some drastic improvements already.
6 Feb 2011 — 3:57pm
My 2 cents:
a, e and s have a very nice personality.
d, h, i, o, n seems too generic to me.
Maybe you can (somehow) translate some of the nice personality from the 1rs group into the second.
Hope it helps
10 May 2011 — 9:52am
Did you do the type design course at Reading as they use the word adhesion for testing?. I'm guessing you know about the adhesion text site where you could generate some copy based on those 8 characters. Until you set some text the real problems won't show up. As Pablo said the a. e, and s, have nice sharp angles while the rest need somthing to echo that. Have you tried having a right foot serif same as "a" on "d" "h" "i" "o" and "n" KEEP GOING